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Stairway to Heaven

The doors to happiness seemed to be closed.
You tried to find love but You were too exposed.
You felt You should escape but don't know where.
To relieve Your despair You should come here,

Where the stairs take You from land to heaven,
You shall leave Your sins behind, there are seven.
The breaths You take here will make You pure.
When morning arrives, You'll find Your cure.





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:iconnevotil:
Actually i don't understand all words of poet :) Sorry, i'm not the best in english. However, your picture is very good and the title is really creative! i like it! :D
:iconb-hart:
Thanks for the :+fav:.
The title has been used before, but thanks ;). Sorry I wrote so complex lines, but I'm still glad you liked the picture :).

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:iconnevotil:
So, is this your poet? :) Ok, i understand the lines, but it will be better when i can read in my mother language :D
The idea was good, anyway ;)
:iconmarxgames:
I like the poem and the other version of that picture.
I wish I could write like that... :pray:
:iconcollidescopic:
The doors to happiness seemed to be closed.
You tried to find love but you were too exposed. (is it You or you...consistancy :) could be a typo)
You felt You should escape but don't know where.
To relieve your despair You should come here. ( full stop here stops the flow of the poem. also "here" does not ryhm with "where" which breaks your structure.)

Where the stairs take you from land to heaven,
You shall leave your sins behind, there are seven. "("there are seven"...isn't needed in my opinion...we know)
The breath You take here will make You pure. (breath? plural maybe? she isn't only gonna take one surely?)
When morning arrives, you'll find Your cure.

the poem is average at best but pretty, my advise? revise it.

the photo however is wonderful and very imaginative. composition wise the whole piece being at an angle does nothing for it. if poss maybe straightne it all out. the filters a good idea but maybe less heat on the stairs.

yeah...good ideas need prodding around a bit but i'll defo fave it when you repost (with or without my advice..it's a great Dev anyway) :)
:iconniliram:
maisaa, sa teed ilgelt kihvte pilte ju!

minu soovitus (veidi teistlaadi): ära mine fotograafiat õ;ppima. tee nii nagu sa ise teed, siis säilib ka see ilus omapära, mitte ei kao kuskile õ;petuste rägastikku.
:icondash-foto-c:
love it so much!!!

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:iconmymilkiaen:
Ooh..Nice effect it leaves,with the clouds and the land across and everything.

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:iconemines:
Good job! :D

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:iconrubberduck354:
Great photo! I love it! :)

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